Va rog sa cititi toata compunerea mea si sa- mi spuneti ce am gresit: my name is Vivi and i'm fourteen years old.I live in... and what can i say about me?
I go for fun with my friends on the outside...? (mai mult)

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Va rog sa cititi toata compunerea mea si sa-mi spuneti ce am gresit: my name is Vivi and i'm fourteen years old.I live in... and what can i say about me?  
  I go for fun with my friends on the outside or we are going to the movies! i'm always smiling and i love life. Sometimes i can get angry very easy.
   Baschetball is my favorite sport.I could play it all day long, but i have to do homeworks and go to school. Speaking of school: my favorite subject is math, is easy to resolve problems.
    my favorite holiday is Christmas because in that day i meet family and enjoy my gifts.I love to make cookies with my mother and decorate the Christmastree with my sister...
    My father is the one who put the gifts under the tree every year. in the Christmas night we eat a special dinner and listen carols toghether.
     I do not think than I have many  talents, but i'm good at music.I play the guitar, and i want in future to play at the piano.My guitar is epiphone (an acustic guitar) and i bought it two years ago.Is like a friend to me.
    when i was little i wanted to sing in a band, but now, i want to do math in future, is a better career.
    
       Ce spuneti? (multumesc celor care au citit-o ) va rog sa ma corectati drastic, deoarece vreau o nota mare

TheAce · Accepted Answer

Nu incurajez facutul temelor de catre altii pe acest site s-au oricare altul dar tu macar te-ai straduit sa iti faci tema si te-ai straduit cat ai putut. Ar trebui sa citesti mai mult in engleza, o sa te ajute mult, se vede ca ai inca destule carente. Nu trebuie sa uiti ca a cunoaste engleza bine e un plus extrem de mare de care vei avea nevoie pe viitor. Sper ca urmatoarea ta tema sa iasa mult mai bine. Acum uite varianta corectata si putin modificata (anumite cuvinte pe care le-ai scris nu prea se potriveau si nu aveau sens in acea forma data:

My name is Vivi and i'm fourteen.I live in... 
What can I say about myself?
I like to hang out with my friends, outdoors mostly but I also like going to the movies with them.  
I'm always smiling and I love life. Sometimes I  get angry very easy.

Basketball is my favorite sport.I could play it all day long, but sadly I also have to be in school and do my homeworks  afterwards.  Speaking of school:
 Math is my favorite subject. I found out that resolving problems is really easy for me.
Christmas is my favorite holiday, because I find it very nice to be surrounded by your family and your loved ones. I also like receiving presents but most of all I love baking cookies with my mother and decorating the christmas tree with my sister.
My father is the one who puts all the  gifts under the tree every year. During the christmas evening  we eat a special dinner and  listen to carols toghether.
I don’t consider myself a person of many talents but I’m good when it comes to music. I play the guitar and I also want to learn to play the piano in the near future. My guitar is an Epiphone Acustic that I bought 2 years ago. I consider it not only a great guitar but a friend!  
When i was little I wanted to play in a band, but now  I’m sure that math would suit me better as a career.

TheAce · Answer

Din pacate e plina de greseli, timpurile sunt puse extrem de aiurea, plus de asta ai destule greseli de fond. Am sa incerc totusi sa iti corectez textul, imediat.
PS: Va rog nu mai postati raspunsuri de genul ''imi place, e  buna'' atata vreme cat un text are peste 20 de greseli mari.Induceti rau de tot in eroare pe cel care chiar asteapta un raspuns RELEVANT si PERTINENT.

vivigreen · Answer

Mersii mult:o3, eu chiar nu ma pricep dar as vrea sa iasa cat de cat ok, mersii mult, si te roog daca ai putea sa il corectezi aar fi excelent

vivigreen · Answer

Multumesc din tot sufletul, si da o sa incerc sa fac tot posibilul sa invat engleza cat mai bine, dar tu cum ai invatat-o mai usor?

TheAce · Answer

N-ai pentru ce, mult succes pe viitor!

TheAce · Answer

N-a fost asa greu. Am invatat-o de mic. Am citit destul de multe carti in engleza, m-am uitat de mic la filme, pe atunci de exemplu desenele animate nu erau dublate, ceea ce a  reprezentat un plus. Recomand sa folosesti des si dicionarele, sa te obisnuiesti sa cauti mereu cand nu stii ceva.

GumiFreeStyle · Answer

Ai pus ''Christmastree'' legat..trebuie dezlegat[desi stiu ca asat nu e o greseala :)) :)), ca pe caiet o vei pune normal ]

1.La ''I could play it all day long'' se puna [I could play it all LONG DAY] daca pui cu day long se observa ca ai tradus pe internet :P

2.La ''I do not think than I have many talents,''  pune [I DON'T think THAT I have many talents]

3. La (an acustic guitar) pune.(an ACOUSTIC guitar)

Cam atat am vazut eu.Dar nu suntprofesoara deci SUCCES!
[Nu am avut timp so verific corect si TImpuri adica gen past simple, prezent continuous; simple...ect dar mi s epare Ok]


E foarte buna.mie una imi place.;)

Loser8299 · Answer

Corect e all day long, nu all long day, e o expresie.

GumiFreeStyle · Answer

Ei bine Loser8299 or nu am fost atenta, eu chiar trebuie sa studiez mai drastic :)).

BomboneleexD · Answer

Super. :D Dca tu ai facut-o, esti super tare. :*

TheAce · Answer

E un text cu peste 20 de greseli majore si tu spui super? Te rog sa nu mai postezi raspunsuri aberante, induci in eroare pe cel/cea care a  pus intrebarea, acel/acea cineva care se bazeaza pe un raspuns PERTINENT si OBIECTIV.